Holiday Reading Challenge 29: Rewrite the Ending No3 - Tim
- Title - Alone in the night
- Author - Holly Webb
- Type of Book - Non-Fiction
- Why your ending is better If I could Rewrite the ending I think my ending would be better because I would have let Jasmine play with the little kittens.
Hi Tim, A suggestion is to include the ending that you wrote because this was the point of the task. If you haven't you should probably start. You should include a picture of the cover because it would make your blog post more eye-catching! Keep it up Tim. Excellent work!
Fine's feedback is spot on Tim. I can see you have thought about a different ending but it is important to make your response clear to your audience. Remember most of us haven't read the same book as you.
Hi Tim, This is great but if you add more detail why is your ending so people can understand what are you talking about. As Mrs Anderson said that most of us haven't read the same book as you. You have wrote a short explanation why is your ending is better. Next time write some more details why is your ending is better. I think you did a great and it will more great if you put the book cover.. Keep up the great work. Sincerely Sanujan
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Hi Tim,
A suggestion is to include the ending that you wrote because this was the point of the task. If you haven't you should probably start. You should include a picture of the cover because it would make your blog post more eye-catching! Keep it up Tim. Excellent work!
Fine
Fine's feedback is spot on Tim. I can see you have thought about a different ending but it is important to make your response clear to your audience. Remember most of us haven't read the same book as you.
Hi Tim,
This is great but if you add more detail why is your ending so people can understand what are you talking about. As Mrs Anderson said that most of us haven't read the same book as you. You have wrote a short explanation why is your ending is better. Next time write some more details why is your ending is better.
I think you did a great and it will more great if you put the book cover..
Keep up the great work.
Sincerely
Sanujan
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